Mysterious Landscapes Troiku

mysterious landscapes
rise and unfold before my eyes
worlds of clouds

Chèvrefeuille

mysterious landscapes
windless rain among the trees
misting my glasses

rise and unfold before my eyes
hills grey and invisible
a foggy haunting

worlds of clouds
dark shadows until a break
reveals honey light

mysterious landscapes
everything brown and silver
flickered with leaf sound

windless rain among the trees
magpie on bare branch
one for sorrow

misting my glasses
the tears of former winters
salt-tang of the sea

rise and unfold before my eyes
mounds of bladderwrack
brought in on the tide

hills grey and invisible
the prospect of a village
prostrate at its foot

a foggy haunting
in empty break-of-dawn streets
houses just waking

worlds of clouds
rain-filled and peopled with ghosts
drifting in drizzle

dark shadows until a break
spreading across the sky’s face
a tentative smile

reveals honey light
behind the grubby blanket
of a winter’s day

Kim M. Russell, 12th December 2020

Magpie Bird Tree - Free photo on Pixabay

My response to Carpe Diem #1841 Just a special challenge. also linked to Poets and Storytellers United Writer’s Pantry

Today we have a challenge to create a double Troiku with the given haiku by Chèvrefeuille. It’s a tough challenge, whereby we first create a Troiku with three new haiku from the given haiku, and then create three haiku from the separated lines of the three new haiku, resulting in 2 new haiku.

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38 thoughts on “Mysterious Landscapes Troiku

  1. Reading this recalled my days of childhood as one discovered the world. In those days youngsters used explore woods and forests, walk bare foot in streams and rivers as there was no such thing as TV! When we got home we listened to the radio when serials of all sorts could be listened to and imagine the scene as actors spoke their lines!

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  2. My kind of haunting – foggy, makes me still, worried there might be something else after the “windless rain among the trees…” If I could like this poem several times, I would.

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  3. This is really impressive, Kim. The sequence is so smooth that one can almost believe that the work was easy. But I’m sure the truth speaks of fine attention to detail. I really enjoyed how you created a picture out of each line, how you added to your masterpiece as you moved forward.

    This is one of my favorites: “a foggy haunting / in empty break-of-dawn streets / houses just waking”. It brings to mind the fog that engulfed my neighborhood yesterday. I can see my hometown in your words. I really like that. 🙂

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    1. Thank you, Bev! I was a bit taken aback by the prompt at first, as the first three haiku created from the given one have to work when they too are made into new ones.

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  4. Absolutely beautiful You painted an amazing landscape Love the French word and my favourite lines are “everything brown and silver
    flickered with leaf sound” and “the tears of former winters salt-tang of the sea”

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  5. This would have been a fun writing project. You can ‘bend’ ti to wherever you want it o go. I liked your trail. I envisioned a small but not too disillusioned youngster on the subway (tube) stairs asleep under his precious winter blanket.
    ..

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