It’s raining old women and sticks;
the lights are on, but the pub’s still closed.
They’re gasping for pints and packets of crisps,
squeezed tight together under the awning,
from which fat globules of water drip,
trickle off ends of unkempt hair
and find their way past grimy collars.
Between the telephone box and bike racks,
old dears regret leaving their umbrellas
in the race for a couple of gin-and-tonics;
they shake their heads and crane their necks
eager to see what the delay might be.
Inside the pub the unwound clock no longer ticks,
the hands are always on opening time – and the lock clicks.
Kim M. Russell, 28th January 2021
My response to dVerse Poets Pub Meeting the Bar: Opening lines… beginnings
This Thursday Peter is back with his first Meeting the Bar for the year. He made me quite envious with his mention of ‘languorous days, steamy nights, mosquitoes whining sweet nothings… the drone of cricket on the radio and crickets in the garden’ – a far cry from our dreary skies and bone-chill.
Today we are flexing our muscles with beginnings and pesky first lines, which Peter says are important, and he has given us a list of reasons as well as some excellent examples.
Our challenge is to find the best first lines to hook ourselves new readers, with vivid images and unusual word use. We can stick with tradition (starting top left) or forge out in a new direction, maybe even a one line or one-word poem, found poetry, or a poem beginning with a line by a poet who’s provoked or enthralled or charmed or annoyed us.
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