Soundless
bubbles slip
from lips;
silent
pops and kisses
become
nouns,
adjectives,
verbs that swim
between
lines
of verse,
glittering silver-
scaled words
whispering
sun-
dappled
through
the length
of a poem,
against the flow,
but with the tide.
Clever fish.
Kim M. Russell, 23rd April 2021
Image by Steve Halama on Unsplash
My response to NaPoWriMo Day Twenty-Three
Day twenty-three and the challenge is to write a poem that responds, in some way, to another. It could be as simple as using a line or image from another poem as a jumping-off point, or it could be a more formal poetic response to the argument or ideas raised in another poem. We might use favourite (or least favourite) poems as the source for our responses. I’ve chosen this line from ‘The Light Gatherer’ by Carol Ann Duffy from her collection Feminine Gospels: “When language came, it glittered like a river, silver, clever with fish”. 23 lines for the 23rd day, World Book Night, and Shakespeare’s birth/death day.
Wow!
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Thanks Graham!
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And congratulations. I had a feeling you might be featured, thoroughly deserved kudos.
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Thank you so much Graham! I’ve only just found out (it’s only 7.15 am) and it’s totally unexpected!
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I just looked and you’re featured too! So nice to have my name alongside yours. Congratulations!
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Fabulous!
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Thanks Marilyn!
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A perfect run from a cool start-line, KR. And thanks for reminding me of Willie’s birth/deathday.
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Thanks Ron!
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I love this. I think it’s just the clever sounds you’ve used but the word lissome springs to mind. Great assonance! It is as it sounds- slippery and silver. Just lovely.
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Thanks so much!
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Oh yes such fish are clever! Feeling too exhausted to reel them in myself today 🎣
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Thank goodness it’s the weekend. I hope you get to relax a bit.😊
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Oh yes, that would be nice! You too 😊
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😊
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Clever lady*
I love this. Makes me want to hold my breath to stay dived in a moment longer!
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Thank so much, Darius!
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Wow! That was so unexpected! Thank you for featuring my poem.
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Clever, Kim. I watched those parts of speech fall into place. Congratulations on being a feature writer tonight. BTW, were the adverbs disappointed or did they not show?
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Thank you so much Jim. That was so unexpected! I’m not long up this morning, so I didn’t know.
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Nice writing! North Norfolk, yay!
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Thank you Christopher! I wasn’t expecting to be a featured poet.
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Great writing
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Thank you!
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My pleasure 😊
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How wonderful Kim. Congratulations and well deserved!
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Thank you, Linda!
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I love this Kim. And congrats on being featured
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Thanks so much!
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And clever, like this.
And congratulations!
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Thank you, Ken!
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This is lovely Kim. You picked a wonderful poet to respond to, and congratulations on the napowrimo feature. (K)
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Thank you, Kerfe. I love Carol Ann Duffy’s work.
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Gosh, adorable verse. ❤️
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Thank you so much!
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